FMA Drabble: That Sound

[lynx212]

Title: That Sound
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Words: 204
Genre: Angst/Suspense
Characters: Al
Rating/Warnings: T 
Summary: Al is running like hell... but he can't get away.
Disclaimer: I make no claims of ownership or profits


Clank clank clank

Al was running as fast as he could.

Clank clank clank

He couldn't believe how horribly things had turned out.

Clank clank clank

Never, not even in the mist of his worst nightmares, could he have imagined this.

Clank clank clank

He could still feel the pain...it shouldn’t be possible but he could.

Clank clank clank

It had happened so quickly and so violently that his mind was still reeling hours later.

Clank clank clank

He pumped his legs harder and harder but there was no outrunning it.

Clank clank clank

So much blood, more blood than he thought a human body as small as Ed’s could hold.

Clank clank clank

The feel of his soul ripped from beyond and bound to something he couldn't feel.

Clank clank clank

The unrelenting sense of being trapped...it has only been hours and the sensation was already driving him mad.

Clank clank clank

Then reality settles all around him, firm and cold like a vise carved out of frozen steel.

Clank clank clank

He wasn’t human anymore. He didn’t have and actual body.

Clank clank clank

And no matter how fast he ran that sound would be wherever he went.

Comments

Bravo...

[binaryalchemist.livejournal.com]

With great skill and artistry, you have taken a few words and captured the entire nightmare of Al's captivity better than others could have done with pages and paragraphs. It is chilling, moving and heartbreaking--and it is brilliant.
Bravo....and thank you so much for sharing.

Re: Bravo...

[lynx212.livejournal.com]

*blushes at the praise*

Thank you my dear. This bunny just jumped out at me and demanded to be written. *hugs on you hard*

I have often wondered if there was any sort of phantom sensation Al had while in the armor...my muse decided yes ^_^

[havemy-heart.livejournal.com]

Oh wow. Poor Al :( Excellent job describing how foreign and horror-inducing it would feel to all of a sudden have no body and be stuck in armor. Not being able to escape from that noise - it really would be a nightmare.

I think I always take for granted that Al is used to being that way, but there was a time when he very much wasn't used to it.

Again, I say wow.

[lynx212.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. This one just jumped in my head so I had to write it. I am a lover of angst but this one was almost to sad to write even for me.

[seatbeltdrivein.livejournal.com]

Al ;____; I can't even begin to imagine the horror of suddenly not feeling *anything*. I mean - just wow.

Awesome job!

[lynx212.livejournal.com]

Thank you. *hugs* I know I couldn't imagine it either, it would be a living nightmare for anyone I think.

[evilchuckles.livejournal.com]

God, that's so powerful and shocking. The sense of claustrophobia. You've really got his panic. My heart started beating so quickly in sympathy.

I'm awed.

[lynx212.livejournal.com]

Thank you ever so much for the praise my dear. This plot bunny grabbed me and wouldn't let go.

Poor Al...*hugs on him*

[kattrip033.livejournal.com]

Very nicely done.

[lynx212.livejournal.com]

Thank you ^_^

[kattrip033.livejournal.com]

You're welcome.