The Muddle Puddle

I've always been a fan of this story, but I've gotta say (at risk of sounding condescending ><) - throughout it, your characters and writing have definitely been maturing. You've got some great one-liners in there and I agree with rinfang, the thought you give to each and every character is wonderful. I like the way you've written the development of Roy/Ed's feelings for each other.. it's a refreshing take on how their relationship is normally written. I also loved the conversation between Riza and Roy and her analogies about the new dishes/MREs, I can totally picture her saying something like that!

I might go back and re-read this on the weekend so I have something more useful/constructive to say ><

This seriously gets better with every chapter - I can't wait until the next one is out!