Thank you and as far as Ed's reaction goes I typed and retyped that more times than I want to admit. I wanted him to come across hurt and overwhelmed but not *girlish* if that makes any sense. We see Ed driven to extreme emotion several times in the series and I didn't want to stray too far from reasonable cause for that. I figured it would have to be something big in his world to bring it about so...hence the Wirny situation.
I will try to explain why the Winry thing may seem so off. I had a big scene I cut out of chapter 3 that would have brought Winry's feelings to light a bit earlier but I nixed it in favor of focusing on Roy and Ed. I have a real bad habit of trying to make EVERYONE the main character in my fics so I let that go since her interaction with Ed is nothing more than a plot device to springboard a bit of drama/angst and reveal more of Ed's character to you guys. As well as define Gracia and Maes' roles as "parent figures" to the Elrics.
In my mind Winry's reaction is nothing more than a bad reaction to major disappointment. Poor girls been pining away but keeping quiet and a lot of her assumptions are twisted. But seeing as how it came across a little odd I might go back and add that scene to chapter three ... who knows ^_^... and you are so right I think it would crush either one of them if she were to hate them.
PS- Thanks for letting me know about the font change(it's fixed now)I posted this then ran out to catch a movie (Spiderwick)
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I will try to explain why the Winry thing may seem so off. I had a big scene I cut out of chapter 3 that would have brought Winry's feelings to light a bit earlier but I nixed it in favor of focusing on Roy and Ed. I have a real bad habit of trying to make EVERYONE the main character in my fics so I let that go since her interaction with Ed is nothing more than a plot device to springboard a bit of drama/angst and reveal more of Ed's character to you guys. As well as define Gracia and Maes' roles as "parent figures" to the Elrics.
In my mind Winry's reaction is nothing more than a bad reaction to major disappointment. Poor girls been pining away but keeping quiet and a lot of her assumptions are twisted. But seeing as how it came across a little odd I might go back and add that scene to chapter three ... who knows ^_^... and you are so right I think it would crush either one of them if she were to hate them.
PS- Thanks for letting me know about the font change(it's fixed now)I posted this then ran out to catch a movie (Spiderwick)