Nice! I'm really enjoying this. I love the thought you give to each and every character, not just to Roy and Ed. I don't totally agree with how you had Winry react to all this, but, hey, each person has their own interpretation of the characters, and I lovehow you had Ed react to Winry's rejection. She really is so important to her boys, it would crush either one of them to really have her hate them.

Just one little, itty bitty thing. Did you notice the font completely changed about nine paragraphs into the chapter? The first font was much easier to read.